2007年9月22日 星期六
adventure
After our dinner today, we went to practice how to ride a motorcycle. Have been living for over twenty years, I still can not ride a motorcycle and do not have a license. However, it was not my first time to ride it on road. But it is quite dangerous to ride motorcycle without license (the most important thing is that it is illegal…). What I should do is going to practice harder and get one license.
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Who is "we"? "My roommate and I"? "Mu best friend and I"? If you don't want your reader to wonder about that, you should say "I went".
"years, I still can not" ==> "years, but I still {can't / cannot}"
"to ride it on road" ==> "to ride one on the road"
"is going to practice harder and get one" ==> "is practice harder and get a"
You get good marks for clarity and communication. Your brief paragraphs are easy to understand. You express yourself well and clearly, and your words and sentences also express your feelings well.
Bill
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